What separates boring writing from hot writing? 
One word: emotion … as in lack of it.
It’s the blah versus juicy that separates the mundane from the page-turner.
The author who writes in the telling mode risks losing the eyes of the reader.
Don’t write the “fish are in the pond.”
Write:
How the brilliance of the day glistens on the magnificent copper and black koi backs …
How the three fish shimmer and glide under and through the lily pads, surfacing to snag the dropped pellets …
How the setting sun creates shadows darkening the brilliant tangerine and yellow colors …
How the alpha koi jets to the surface to claim his morsel prize, pushing the others out of his way …
When you do, you’ve revealed to your reader a new world … not just another word or nondescript phrase. Your reader envisions what you wrote.
Dr. Judith Briles is The Book Shepherd … Publishing & Book Marketing Expert, Coach, Consultant … Author of 43 books including How to Avoid Book Publishing Blunders, her memoir When God Says NO, and her historical fiction debut The Secret Journey. Subscribe to her Tuesday and Saturday blogs on her website, https://TheBookShepherd.com.
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